tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-401012145792484267.post9033482856901703413..comments2011-10-21T08:50:26.051-06:00Comments on Smith English 9 11-12: pln 2anneshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00573450327737964454noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-401012145792484267.post-1184459485117848132011-08-31T13:54:41.462-06:002011-08-31T13:54:41.462-06:00Joey- nice start with a topic sentence. You have t...Joey- nice start with a topic sentence. You have the right idea, but combine the points into one sentence. Nice separation of paragraph points. I like that I know what your focus is in each paragraph. Additionally, work on proofreading those paragraphs and expanding with detailed examples. Use specifics to help illustrate what you are trying to say. Excellent job on your conclusion. Please add some pictures to support.anneshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00573450327737964454noreply@blogger.com